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Please help to estimate quality of English #2

Hi,
I would like to continue discussion from here: http://discuss.joelonsoftware.com/default.asp?biz.5.852464.21

I've ordered new translation and upated the text.
Could you please estimate the quality of English on this page form 1 to 10 (1 very poor, 10 - ideal) again: http://www.icondesignlab.com/en/mobile2/

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Roman Rudnik Send private email
Tuesday, April 23, 2013
 
 
That is much better than the previous effort.

Mostly it reads nicely, but the final sentence lets you down: "That is why we already have over 150 satisfied clients and we simply must do our job well."

This would be better, IMHO: "We already have over 150 satisfied clients and we are proud of the work we do."

Now, I'd say it was 8/10. It could be more persuasive, i.e. stronger marketing, but at least it makes sense as English now.
Scorpio Send private email
Tuesday, April 23, 2013
 
 
Between 9 and 10. Other than the 'ru' in the top right corner, which I would disappear if I were you, I would have thought it was from the US. I did spot this though: 'Develop the application graphic design' should be ' 'Develop the application's graphic design'. G'luck!
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